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Fifth Grade Students Write  Mysteries November
2007

My Mystery
Eric H

Friday night at seven o’clock the captain’s daughter was missing. Little did he know, a tall man had his daughter. The tall man used a telephone booth to call the captain. “For me to give you your daughter back, you must give me a million dollars.” The tall man said. So the captain asked, “What do you need a million dollars for?” “Well, I’m leaving on a trip to Hawaii and I need the money to pay rent.” But, the captain only agreed to give the man nine-hundred dollars. So, the tall man said, “Sounds fair enough to me.” The next day the tall man gave the captains daughter back and took his nine-hundred dollars. The day after that the tall man went on his trip. Also the captain took his daughter on a cruise on his ship he named “The titanic 2”.  

My Mystery
Jordan

            This Friday night at seven o’clock I am coming to get it. What are you going to get? You will get your sweetheart back if I get my million dollars. If I don’t get my million dollars then I give her to the captain of the glue ship. The captain of the glue will take her to glue island and give her to a tall man who is a tribe leader. The only way you can talk to her is by calling from the telephone booth.  

My Mystery
Kayla F.

June 28, 1987

            On Friday night at seven o’ clock I was standing around, waiting to get my ticket for the boat. But then I saw a tall man standing in a telephone booth. He looked mysterious. When he was in the booth I heard him say something about leaving on a trip to collect about a million dollars. All of a sudden he walked in the line to get a ticket for the boat I was going on. I got my ticket and waited for him. I came right behind him when we were boarding. The captain was there so I talked to him. Telling him about how the guy acted, and how I felt his personality was. He agreed. I told him to keep an eye out for him. The captain told me the same. I layed a good eye on him. When he was playing Bingo, I thought that it would be a good time to read the newspaper. Then right before my eyes I saw the man’s picture with a big wanted sign over it. Since I am part of the FBI unit I stood up and said Freeze to the strange man, whos’ name is William Smelltzer. The man (a.k.a. William Smelltzer) was arrested and got reported to the county jail in Petosky, MI.

                                                Caleb E. Wrightinowski

                             ( this is from the journal of Caleb E. Wrightinowski)

 

My Mystery
Payton

            Friday night at seven o’clock I’m leaving on a trip to solve a mystery that happened on a ship. The mystery was a million dollars was missing that a tall man had. The captain seemed really nervous and suspicious when people where around. The tall man was the richest person on the ship. The captain wanted some newer things on his ship. He went and asked the tall man if he could buy some new things around the ship and the tall man said ok. He went and bought a bunch of new things for the ship. Some of the stuff the captain the captain did not like. The tall man bought a telephone both and weird stuff like that but the tall man liked it and the captain did not. The captain stole the tall mans million dollars. When the tall man didn’t couldn’t find his million dollars he could have blown threw the roof he was so mad. He hired some investigators with the little money he had. The investigators interviewed almost all the people on the boat. When the investigators interviewed the captain he cracked. He said” he had to confess not a clue why but he did. We couldn’t believe he was the one even know its pretty oveyos but still. After that the tall man got his money back and the captain well he got arrested.

The Big Mystery
Jacinda M

Dear Mr. Faminy,

            Friday night at seven o’clock their were shadows in the distance at Michigan Street. I didn’t know exactly what they were at the time so but I had a pretty good idea. A couple was at a telephone booth. It seems as if they were calling a relative or whoever. They won’t say anything about it. Anyway, they were leaving on a trip in a taxi cab. Then a tall man with a large black coat, a top hat, and a brief case snook up behind them. Then, he ordered them to get in another taxi cab and ordered the first one to drive off. The taxi cab license plate number was: 13B9F2. We followed the car and it stopped at a restaurant called “The Captain’s Corner.” Leaving behind a million dollars the man got in the police car with gauds around so he would escape while we looked for the couple inside. We found them locked up in a closet but neither was seriously wounded. We questioned them and found the tall man guilty. He is in the county jail and the couple is safe at home after the trip.

Sincerely,

Detective Nancy Drew  

My Mystery
Julie L.

            I’m 10 years old and I love to solve mysteries. This is how my first big mystery started. My mom and I were going to the bank and the banker told us that all the money in the bank was gone. So I thought I should go find all of the money. That night when my mom went to sleep I went down stairs and left a note on the table. It said I was leaving on a trip. The next morning it was Friday. Mom was still a sleep so I left. I had to meet a tall man in a telephone booth on First Street. When I got there the man was not there so I waited. I waited for many hours. He came at Friday night at seven o’clock that night. We talked about the missing money. He told me who stole the money, it was the captain of the biggest crew. He showed me a pitcher of him. I took it and turned him in!

                        A few weeks later the police found him. It turned out he stole a million dollars. Once everyone knew I solved the mystery I got to be mayor for a day.

         So that’s my big mystery!!!!

My Mystery
Elija

            Once upon a time in 1812 in July on a Friday night at seven o clock a million dollars was stole from the Wichita bank. The security camera showed a tall man was steeling it out of the safe. The cops froze the image and seen a pin of a captain of a ship. It was the captain of the S.S. paradise. The captain’s name was Roger. T he knew that he was leaving on a trip. The cops saw him in the telephone booth.  The cops quickly told the harbor manager to not let the  paradise go through. The manager said “ok”. The next morning the captain was arrested and was sent to jail. The million dollars was returned and the mystery of the missing million was solved.

Mystery Writing
Gerald

            Friday night at seven o’ clock a tall man walked into a telephone booth. The tall man went missing. So there was a million dollar reward. He was leaving on a trip, so the  captain  of the trip (he was going on) went out to find him. Later next morning the man was found by the captain. The captain was rewarded a million dollars. The tall man had called the airport and the lady at the desk said the flight was canceled. So the man went back home. He was asking about the wrong flight so he went back to the bus station where the captain later found him at.

Mystery Writing
Alexis

            Friday night at seven o’clock the parents of two little girls where token. The girls woke up to find they were alone. They looked outside and saw a tall man standing in the dark ally where the house started to end. They stared at him but they heard a loud noise and looked away. The two girls grabbed their favorite toy. One grabbed a teddy bear and the other grabbed a ship with the captain init. They soon went back to sleep. In the morning their baby sitter woke them up. When they got up they went down stairs to eat breakfast. When the baby sitter got the mail she read the girls that they could win a million dollars so they entered and won. They soon after herd from the baby sitter asking if their parents were leaving on a trip. So the kids thought they did and just went on with eating. The next day they saw their baby sitter talking in the telephone booth. The next day a letter came in the mail and in the envelope the letter said,” I have your parents you’ll get them back safe for a million dollars. Meet in phone booth.” They soon got their parents back and lived very well. P.S the two little girls were very happy to have won the million dollars it was very handy. Oh the tall man was never seen again but they soon saw him at the bus stop but any way they were very, very happy to be a family.

Mystery
Megan

            Once there was a girl named Emily. Emily loved to solve mysteries. One day Emily could not find her dog. Emily found a note in her mailbox about an hour after her dog went missing. The note said Dear Emily, I took your dog. If you want him back meet me at the alley on Corner street on Friday night at seven o’ clock. I am a tall man I will be in a telephone booth with your dog. Bring a million dollars if you want your dog back. I will be leaving on a trip at seven thirty with the captain of the ship. Then I will give you your dog back and you will bring me the money.
From,
the tall man.

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My Mystery
Andrew

Once there was a family that was going to Wisconsin on a fairy. They had to meet the fairy on Friday night at seven o’clock. The family was on there way to the fairy. Finely they got there.  They got out of the car with there stuff. When they were all done the captain asked if they were going to Wisconsin the family said yes. He pointed to a wooden ship with no sailors on it. The family asked ware were all the sailors were he said they will be there I think. Once they got on the ship they noised that the ship creaked and smelled like rotten eggs. They thought twice about leaving on a trip. But it was too late because they already left shore. They were sitting down and a tall man walked in the door. He said we will arrive in one hour. Finally they got there and got off the ship. There was a telephone booth So they called there cousins and said we made it there. After a few days past they wondered when they were going back. They went back to the ship. The captain was gone. So they said it to the captains boss and he said if you find him I will give you 1 million dollars.  So the family looked for a few days. And on the last day of looking they found him. He was walking around. So they went back. They made it back home.     

Mystery Writing
Louise

            One night a tall man was walking on 4th street. He was carrying a black suitcase, walking in the rain. He looked very suspicious.  He started to walk toward a telephone booth. I was watching him out of my bedroom window. Suddenly I lost sight of him. It seemed he knew I was watching him. I caught a glance of him walking into a big building. He was walking into Union Station. That’s where my mom took me to go on a train. I could see his shadow walking up a flight of stairs. I got scared and hid under my covers. I fell asleep. The very next day my mom took me with her to go buy a newspaper. On the front page was the tall man with the suitcase. It said that the Capitan of these train was shot on Friday night at seven o’clock. I thought the tall man was leaving on a trip. Then I read that they found a million dollars in the suitcase belonging to the man. “So that’s what was in the suitcase” I thought. My mom saw my face and asked me if I knew that man. I nodded and told him what I saw. The man was found guilty and got arrested. I’ll never forget that day.

A Big Mystery
Hanah

            One Friday night at seven o’clock I was walking through town and there was a telephone booth, and I had to call someone. When I went up to the phone it rang!  There was a tall man standing next to the booth. When the phone rang the tall man ran over and picked up the phone. I said well excuse you gees. Then I couldn’t help over hearing, so I stayed and listened. The person on the other line said you need to leave on a trip to get your little boy. When you arrive meet me in the restroom in Applebee’s. I gasped in my mind. The guy also said and I want a million dollars, he also said I am the captain of the Saltoon 3, so if you do not complete everything I told you, you could be in serious trouble you and your son. The tall man hung up the phone and ran away head down and all. The next morning on the news I heard the captain of Saltoon 3 was arrested for kid napping a child. That night I saw the same tall man with a smile and a little boy. I was very happy that day for the little boy and the tall man.  

A Mystery
Kyler E.

           One Friday night at seven oclock  I saw a rilly tall man walking in a dark ally  and then I wean on a trip on a ship and got a million dollars from my dad and then I got lost and I had to use a phone booth that was at the bottom of the boat   then I went to the top of the boat and met the  scary captain  one night I woke up at  twlv oclock and I had to go the bathroom  and im looked for my watch cuz it had a light on it but it was gone so I used my lamp and looked for my watch and I found it  then I went to the bathroom then I went back to my room  and my lamp was gone so I was to tired so i just went to bed

Mystery
Anna

            One morning in my class room we were waiting for are teacher Mrs. Peep. The board said work on spelling until she gets back from her meeting. Five minutes passed and finally she walked in. Good morning class Mrs. Peep said. Sorry I was so late but you now what they say time flies when you’re drinking Coffee. The rest of the day was fun as usual. The next morning there was another note on the board. It said: Hello Kids you’re probably wondering were your teacher is. Well if you ever want to see her again be at the telephone booth Friday night at seven o’clock. The captain of the Jolly Roger is going to be there with your teacher. Oh he’s a tall man so don’t worry you wont miss him. Don’t forget I need one million dollars. If you don’t get the money your teacher is leaving on a trip and not coming back! The kids were very scared. One kid had an idea. Friday the class went to the booth and gave him the money, but what he doesn’t know is that all that’s in there is 5 pennies and a nickel.

Mystery Writing
Jon

     There was a man who was going for a boat trip. When he was leaving for the trip he found a note. It said if you want your boat back meet me at the captains dock. Then the man went to a telephone booth to call the police but…the wires were cut and there was another note. It said be there Friday at seven o’clock. Then the man ran to the police office and told them the story and they didn’t believe him. Then a day later he found another note. It said you have three left and you best have one million dollars by Friday. Then the man got real mad because he didn’t own one million dollars. Three days past and it was Friday. It was seven o’clock and the person wasn’t there. Four minutes past and a tall man arrived in his boat. The tall man said do you have the money. The man said yes I do. So he gave the tall man the money and took his boat back. Then the man finally got to go on his trip.

The Mystery
Caitlin

            One day Lucy Babbitt was talking to her friend Sara on the phone. Lucy said she saw a tall man. Sara said “Where were you?”. Lucy said “In a

telephone booth”. What did you do asked Sara? I stayed in the booth said Lucy. Lucy said the tall man was carrying a big bag with money in it. Lucy said I heard on the news that a million dollars was stolen three days ago. Sara said when did this happen. Lucy said three days ago Friday night at seven o’clock. He was in a hurry. Lucy said he looked like the captain of a boat. He mite of been on leaving on a trip with the money. We will never now the mystery of the tall man.

My Mystery
Devin C.

Last Friday at seven o’clock. A tall man was at his house packing. He was leaving on a trip.  So the tall man went to town to use a telephone booth. He was asking his best friend if he would watch his pets his friend said, “Yes”. So he turned around to get in his car it was gone. So he ran to the police station. The Captain was at his desk . The tall man said, “ My car was stolen”. The police captain asked if there was anything valuable. The tall man said, ”There was a suit case full of clothes and a million dollars”.  The police captain said, “maybe it got towed”. So the tall man went to where all the towed cars go. His car wasn’t there. So then he went back to the telephone booth. There his car was covered with snow. He forgot it was snowing. Then he uncovered his car and got in and went on vacation.

My Mystery
Devin T.

One Friday night at seven o’ clock a young boy was walking at the marina. He bumped into a tall man that was dressed like an olden day pirate. The man said where are you going. Then the boy said I am not supposed to talk to strangers. The man said I’m not that strange. Then the man said I am going to be leaving on a trip. The boy said can I come with you. Is it ok with your parents the man said. I don’t know i’ll go call them on that telephone booth. The boy called them no answer. He tried to call them again no answer. The boy said that his parents were going to be home all night. Maybe we can go look for them the man said.  What are we supposed to look for them on the marina doors are locked and we are locked in and all we have are boats the boy said. The man said why don’t we go look for them on my ship. Once they arrived to the mans ship it looked like an olden day pirate ship. The boy said how much did the ship cost. Over a million dollars the man said. If this is your ship that makes you the captain dosen’t it. Well yah said the man. Once they set sail the boy heard a noise coming from a room on a ship. He opened the door and there were his parents all tied. He untied his parents and they ran to a close life boat. Once they were in the water the crew came out of the bottom deck. The boy did’nt see the Jolly Rodger flag why he got aboard the ship in the first place. The crew fired cannons at them but they made it to shore in time.

My Mystery
Kayla K.           

            One day when a family was leaving on a trip. The trip was on a boat. They had to help the captain find a million dollars. Somebody took it when he was down at the bottom of the boat. When he came back up it was gone. On Friday night at seven o’clock they saw a tall man. The tall man had a big, long jacket on. He was going over to a telephone both. He started to call somebody. Then we saw some money sticking out of his coat pocket. The family and the captain ran over to him. It was the person who took the million dollars. The got a award for helping the captain find a million dollars.

 

My Mystery
Katie H.

     One day a little girl named Karen was walking home from school. When all of a sudden a van pulled up, two men jumped out and grabbed Karen. Karen was so scared. Meanwhile, Karen’s father sat at his desk waiting for his daughter when a letter arrived. It said to leave

     A million dollars in a telephone booth or he’d never see his daughter again. He really loved his daughter, and he was rich. He was rich because he was the captain of a big ship. So he took a million dollars out of a vault he had near his room. Then he left the million dollars in a telephone booth. As he left he saw a tall man take the money out and left in a hurry. “No wonder he left in a hurry, he was leaving on a trip!” said the captain. That was the due date was 7 o’ clock Friday night. Then the captain left and at home Karen was waiting for him. From then on the captain took Karen to and from school. To make sure the kidnapping didn’t happen again.